As I walked into the trenches I felt petrified and sceard. The trench was very muddy, wet and cold and also very smelly. Meanwhile the sandbags and floorboards were all around and I was very nervous about shooting and fighting. However it was cold and dark at night and the thought of getting trench rot terrified me. Actually though I felt proud that I was standing up for my contry.
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Mr Lockey
20/11/2014 09:52:32 am
I like your choices of sentence opener Isla, some connectives have been used to show you can meet your target. Lots of descriptive language is also used.
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Jack Simpson
30/11/2014 02:23:10 am
Very well done
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