It was finally here the day of my ultimate adventure. I was the one who had been chosen to go up in space to see if there had been any life or if there is going to be in the future! I was feeling nervous and excited because I hadn’t been before and didn’t know what to expect. I was travelling in a super fast spaceship up in the Milky Way. Maybe there are aliens on planet Gravitude and other life forms? Upon arrival there appears to be too much gravity on planet Gravitude, so I guess I’m stuck here?
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Paige Jones
24/3/2015 12:01:45 am
I love your story its awesome I really loved it going up to space would be an epic adventure to do it about EPIC...
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James plank
25/3/2015 12:59:57 am
I love your story it is fan and better than some of the others I have read best so far I can't wait and find out what other stories your amazing character goes on to love it EPIC...
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Sahara( UK 100 wc )
26/3/2015 12:59:10 am
I love your story it is an amazing piece of writing and also interesting I imagine what it would be like if I go up in space also try and use one more adverb if possible thank you keep writting stories in the 100 word challenge I've been reading all of your stories they are always awesome and keep on forgetting to give you a comment
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Erin F
26/3/2015 01:02:22 am
I love your story its an awesome piece of writting an they always are thank you for all your nice stories I love all of them your character goes on loudes of adventures I bet she needs a break.
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Abbie S
26/3/2015 01:07:53 am
I love your stories they are always amazing piece of writing and also try to keep your stories up because they are always interesting EPIC... pieces of writing and also try to keep your character going on amazing of adventures.
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Pizza dog
27/3/2015 02:59:50 am
Well done your 100wc was amazing! I loved reading it but you need to remember to include commas, if you do your story will be even better. E.g. 'It was finally here the day of my ultimate adventure' needs a comma after finally.
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Micah
17/4/2015 12:13:29 pm
Great Job on concerete sensory details. I like how descriptive you said about the spaceship!
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