I was standing in utter darkness, no one to be seen what happed to them? As I looked around I heard a roar coming from the west side of town. Pacing at my toes I thought I was dreaming, I could smell beer coming from the pubs and also I could smell fear… What should I do ? Should I help? It would be too much of a risk surly. Standing with my head held high and back straight I marched into the cave. I walked into the darkness and lit a fire to keep me warm. I peered around to see if anyone was near.
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3/10/2014 12:06:53 am
Hi Millie, wow I was hooked the minute I read your first sentence. Your use of questions created a sense of urgency. You painted with words an effective scene of confusion and fear. I really liked the way you could smell the beer and fear- clever! Keep up the terrific writing, Felicity Kay Team 100 WC
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