Its autumn 2014 and the leaves rustled smoothly along the park. A little boy called Cian loves the park, luckily he lives right next to the park. He always has a picnic but he could’ t this day because it is snowing. He went to the park to have a snowball fight with his friend Tommy, he was on the same team. Tommy and Cian made an igloo then the other team made a snow man. Then they started the war Tommy and Cian were trashing the other team. The sun went down so they went home to play on the xbox.
30/11/2014 10:18:02 am
Well done, Jacque. The prompt was in the past tense so you really needed to do your work in the past tense too. It would be a good idea to check through and have a look for where you accidentally slipped into the present tense.
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